I post the whole writing again because I think that way everyone can see the comments clearly and also it may helps our discussion on Tuesday night.
Solving problem is a reflection of personality. People make their decision for solve problems, and then grown up through these experiences. For me, family and friends play the most important roles in my process of problem-solving. Besides, I always get some help from internet, there are many kind people could answer whatever the question. And ask the experienced person is also a clever way to help you find a right way.
Pay attention to your tense, and be sure you use the correspondent tense in the whole article. Furthermore you have the same problem with the subject, but you’d better choose only one.
Basically, I always call parents are the teacher of my problem-solving. Teacher is the role who teach you how to study, but not help you do the homework; same as parents. I tell them what my problem is, and they give me some valuable advice according to their abundant experiences in life. After I got parents’ suggestion, I will ask for friends help. Since we live in different generation, they don’t have the some feeling as I am but friends _. My friends could provide several resources to help me deal with the problem, and they stand in my position make me feel there are somebody understand my worries. Therefore, I am more confident of solving the problem with my parents and friends.
There are some grammatical problems in this paragraph. Also, you have to make your subject(s) more clearly, for example, people may feel confused with the “we”, because you just mention “friends” before.
By the way, I use gray color to stand for the good sentence.
With the progress of the era, internet has becoming the NO.1 necessary in human life. I use internet research searching system very often, not to mention nowadays most convenient forum of “asking and answering”. I could get many suggestion_ from internet forum, whatever the problem it is, there are always has kind person they could give you some information about it. For example, I like go travel alone or plan with my friends. Every time we start planning an unfamiliar country, internet is our library and those internet friends just like our tour leader. Finally we could plan our whole itinerary by ourselves without spending money to hire a tour leader.
I’m not sure that the first two noun phrases are right or wrong. Anyway, you still have the grammatical problems in this paragraph.
A problem is cause by a reason, and an action follows consequences. I will figure out the reason first, and then ask for some professional advice. For instance, if I got the problem about science subject, I will ask someone who is good at science. In my opinion, I think every person has their own ability, that’s why we need to make more friends and never enough. I like to make friends in every field, because I will meet every possible problem in the future, they could aid me with their profession. On the other hand, I always look seriously about my decision, it might bring me to a lot of consequences, so I need those experts to help me solving problem wisely.
To set up my ideas, when the problems coming, I always rely on my family, friends, and the person who is professional in the field, and internet help me find more information. It really works for me, at least I always solving problem very confident since I make these way.
You’d better use another conjunction and expression here.
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