Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to be with friends most of the time. Do you prefer to spend your time alone or with friends? Use specific reasons to support your answer. (Please write in 300-350 words within 30 mins)
Time is precious and spending time with good friends makes it even more precious. I prefer to spend time with friends, for it always brings me unmeasurable pleasure which I can’t have by myself.
There are two main reasons that support my idea. First of all, spending time alone is quiet and peaceful, but quietness meas no laughter and lonliness. Nevertheless, hanging out with friends is full of fun and laughter. It is said that once you smile, you will feel happy. Everytime I get together with my friends, they can make me smile naturally. That’s why I prefer spending time with friends. Moreover, while hanging out with friends, you can not only share your feelings to them but also your let out your pressure and problems. For instance, when I fell out of love, my friends are alwayse by my sidecomforting me. In other words, friends can give you good advices and help you overcome the problems.
Furthermore, one friend represents one world; thus, spending time with friends means you can explore severl worlds at the same time. For example, I have friends studying in Japan, America, and England. They always share with me what they see in foreign countries, which really interests me and broaden my perspective about the world. Sometimes, it is just like reading a great book while spending time talking and listening to your friends.
I believe that spending time with friends is advantagious. People can’t live without friends. They are the bridges that help you connect with the world and make your groups in the society, which is also how society is built up. In a word, I prefer to spend time with friends much more than being alone.
3 comments:
I think it's good for you to use such a lot of conjunctions and phrases to make your writing more fluent. Moreover, you use the saying exactly to the right degree in para 2 and that indeed help you to support your opinion.
Even though you did such a great job, I still have some suggestions for you to improve.
First, at the third line, the word "unmeasurable" means "unpredictable", so I wonder if you want to use the word "immeasurable" which means "uncountable" or not. But it really confuses me.
Second, the first line in the final paragraph, you use the word "advantagious", and I think it should be "advantageous", but still I think it's not a great word here. Maybe you can write as "I believe that spending time with friends is more suitable (fitting) for my real nature, just like people can't live without friends."
There is still a small question that you have few words in wrong spelling, and I suggest you can post your writing to WORD for checking the spelling. By the way, your writing is well organized and I believe you can do better from now on.
ha, I gave you the wrong version. I did change the worng spelling.
^^ Thanks for your advice!
1.You use ample conjunctions that are really good! “First of all”,” Nevertheless”,” In a word”…
2.And read your article is very comfortable just like read a book. I love these sentences. “Time is precious and spending time with good friends makes it even more precious”, “They always share with me what they see in foreign countries, which really interests me and broaden my perspective about the world”.
3.Conclusion, which might perfect your article. Just like we discuss in this meeting.
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