Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Telephones and email have made communication between people less personal. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Led by the advanced technology we human have created indeed, peoples’connection has enhanced and thus we bound to have some links whether tight or loose with people around us. For today ’s world by no means the communication tool such as telephone and email or any other high technology people use is never far away from us and even, lack of it, people may alienated by the communicative society. But it also reminds us the machines we have manufactured truly resolve in many problems between people.
It seems that the communication means allow us to contact with friends or families more easily, however, we just talk online or by voice rather than face-to-face contact. In this way on surface we are so connected and engaged but the alienation among people actually prevent people from establishing the real relation with people. Take business for example, the deals handled often by mails really is time-saving, but the trust between business owners and clients is ignored in terms of long-term reliability and interaction to make sure the network of real realtion is linked and promised.
And we often get misunderstood by false translation just depend on the voice and words. We can imagine that something is going wrong or proceed poorly because of gestures or facial expression is not seen realistic on the spot to justify the real talking or communication. To avoid this, we sometimes need the face-to-face interaction to discuss something serious or may get misinterpreted easily. Take myself for example, I still remember one time I argued with my friends about the assignment, we just discussed online and everyone should responsible for his part. However, in the end we did a bad presentation before class. Track back to the original cause, we thought we have the wrong negotiation and the communication is terribly neglected. If we first communicate to share our parts and to correct each other we may not lose our chances. What I want to emphasize is that we people often think that the assignments or jobs are assigned thus we just focus on personal part but individual work, instead, replace the importance of real sharing and communication which should based on the hints expressed by face or hands.
Above all are the two disadvantages of telephone and email that let us in a situation which we encounter everyday. Of course not only the two events we have to face but also others, the main point is that we can make the most use of telephone and email even others , also, don’t forget the real core of communication still rely on the network of touching and feeling of people.
Led by the advanced technology we human have created indeed, peoples’connection has enhanced and thus we bound to have some links whether tight or loose with people around us. For today ’s world by no means the communication tool such as telephone and email or any other high technology people use is never far away from us and even, lack of it, people may alienated by the communicative society. But it also reminds us the machines we have manufactured truly resolve in many problems between people.
It seems that the communication means allow us to contact with friends or families more easily, however, we just talk online or by voice rather than face-to-face contact. In this way on surface we are so connected and engaged but the alienation among people actually prevent people from establishing the real relation with people. Take business for example, the deals handled often by mails really is time-saving, but the trust between business owners and clients is ignored in terms of long-term reliability and interaction to make sure the network of real realtion is linked and promised.
And we often get misunderstood by false translation just depend on the voice and words. We can imagine that something is going wrong or proceed poorly because of gestures or facial expression is not seen realistic on the spot to justify the real talking or communication. To avoid this, we sometimes need the face-to-face interaction to discuss something serious or may get misinterpreted easily. Take myself for example, I still remember one time I argued with my friends about the assignment, we just discussed online and everyone should responsible for his part. However, in the end we did a bad presentation before class. Track back to the original cause, we thought we have the wrong negotiation and the communication is terribly neglected. If we first communicate to share our parts and to correct each other we may not lose our chances. What I want to emphasize is that we people often think that the assignments or jobs are assigned thus we just focus on personal part but individual work, instead, replace the importance of real sharing and communication which should based on the hints expressed by face or hands.
Above all are the two disadvantages of telephone and email that let us in a situation which we encounter everyday. Of course not only the two events we have to face but also others, the main point is that we can make the most use of telephone and email even others , also, don’t forget the real core of communication still rely on the network of touching and feeling of people.
3 comments:
Actually, your article took me a lot of time to read because the complex sentence patterns, but I'm not sure if others have the same feeling with me or not. But in my own opinion, I think you can shorten your sentences instead of using splendid ones.
On the other hand, I cannot catch your ideas very clearly even when I read the second paragraph, so maybe you can give your alternatives at the very beginning, that way the readers can grasp them easier.
Finally, I guess the third paragraph is a little disgressive ......
1. the opening and the ending are really good because they are connected and you made a great conclusion.
2. u could try to use more simple structure, that will help audience understand it easily and catch main idea quickly.
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* alienation
* the alienation among people actually prevent people from establishing the real relation with people.
* What I want to emphasize is that ...
Dear Joseph:
Your idears are great and you do use diffcult words and sentence structures; however, you often use two or more verbs in a sentence! I think the problem for your article is that you need to practice more on the technique to combine clauses with conjunctions, etc.
:)
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