Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to be with friends most of the time. Do you prefer to spend your time alone or with friends? Use specific reasons to support your answer. (Please write in 300-350 words within 30 mins)
I spend most of my time with my friends or my families even when I was tried and just went from work. Spending time along is good, because it can make me considering with myself, such as thinking of what has happened, how it would be, what will my future like, and so on. However, being with people, especially my friends, makes me felt more comfortable and happier. Through them, I can learn more than only by myself.
There goes a Chinese saying, “a friend just like a good book.” Being with friends, you can learn more just like reading a good book. When listening my friends’ traveling experiences, I will know many foreign life styles with the country them had visited. If I talk to someone who has just argued with his friends, I would know much about how to communicate with other people. A friend is a door to the world; through them I almost can know everything about the world.
Moreover, a friend is better than a good book. Sometimes I can learn more details or information than the travel books when listening to my friends’ traveling experience. Books can not listen to my complaint but a friend would; books can not reply my question actively but a friend could; besides, books can not help me to solve some tiresome problems but a friend might. In this way, friends are important than books as for me.
My friends accompanied me in every important time of my life. I still remember the first time I falling in love and I almost shared my happiness with my best friends immediately. Similarly, it is my best friends consoled me with soft words when I broke up with somebody. They smile with me and cry with me. It is impossible to be replaced by anything.
2 comments:
I really appreciate the first and the last sentences of para 2, because they're good metaphors and make your writing more beautiful.
However, here comes the problems.
When I saw your first paragraph, I felt confused about your position of this topic, and to avoid that, I think to indicate your alternative directly is the best and safest policy. So maybe you can revise it as "I prefer to spend my time with friends, because ....... Even though spending time alone is good for me to ......., I still ......."
On the other hand, there are some grammatical errors you have to pay attention to. For example, in para 2, "I will know many foreign life styles with the country them had visited" should be modified as "I will know many foreign lifestyles about the countries they had visited" And even it's good to compare books and friends in para 3, you'd better use the same auxiliary of both sides in the same sentence.
Moreover, I have another suggestion that para 2 and 3 may combine with each other, and if you can add a paragraph of conclusion it would be better and make it whole.
Cheer up! And do your best!
1.You describe the feeling and reason are all very persuadable, and extend the idea of example is very vivid!
2.The main idea could more clearly in one passage, it helps your audience to catch the point quickly. Also, you could add a conclusion in the article to make your structure stronger.
3.“There goes a Chinese saying”, “besides, books can not help me to solve some tiresome problems but a friend might.”. Very helpful sentances.
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